tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1966268702453044660.post4232321347638914855..comments2024-02-29T00:38:48.299-08:00Comments on Sand, Cider and Spaceships: The Fall of the JoveDrackarnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13450640948811964177noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1966268702453044660.post-3569588382255002592014-01-03T15:57:10.201-08:002014-01-03T15:57:10.201-08:00I volunteer as tribute! English is not my native l...I volunteer as tribute! English is not my native language, but I'm still pretty good at it :) plus I've loved your stories so far and it would be awesome to proofread the next one<br /><br /><br />Here are some (maybe) corrections/clarification to this piece. No need to post this comment if you don't feel like it :)<br /><br />"They had traded technology with the other races, it was they who gave capsuleer technology."<br />Gave (the) capsuleer (their cloning) technology?<br /><br />"The last mothership is expected to the the final one to take that journey"<br />Expected to (be) the final one?<br /><br />"Yes. We believe the humans will first cross the at the Sumania Expanse."<br />Cross the at the?<br /><br />-ZzzzleepyheadZzzzleepyheadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05580257327756562799noreply@blogger.com